Giant fic needs giant help

[lynnafer.livejournal.com]

I am looking for a beta to help me polish up my fic. It's about 24 000 words. The first 10 000 have bee reviewed so many times that there's probably not much to do there.

Things I need help with:
-Double checking that I haven't screwed up the POV
-Fixing any areas where I've changed tense in a way that makes no sense
-catching small typos
-blending the dialogue into the narrative
-pointing out any places where the scenes don't flow together because I've forgotten to go back and write the stuff that comes in between

It's really not as rough as it seems, but I could definitely use a fresh eye as I am sick of looking at this thing.

warnings:
-R-NC17
-character death
-graphic medical content

email me at lynnafer82@hotmail.com (I'm on MSN with that name too). or I'm on AIM as lynnafer82.

I will be eternally grateful, offer loads of cookies or be an indentured slave to anyone who wants to take up this challenge.